Friday, March 21, 2008

Promise

One writing community on Orkut has taken Promise as the theme for this week. To write about.. I will try to scribble something about Promise too

Promise

Dewy eyed little girl
The path of that butterfly
Outstretched finger
To the dotted black wing

Outstretched little finger
Over this blue green nerve
As he turns his back
His clenched fist
Under her meek fingers

The stone pathway
Away from their home
His lonesome walk
Back to the empty shack

Betrayal.
Outstretched little hand
The promise put to death

1 comments:

Saibal Barman said...

It is ultimately the death that remains infallibly attainable promise; a death put to unavoidable attainment of promise--sooner or later !
It's a stunning composition, conveying both reality and its approximation through consciousness. This exposes much of the present world's guilt, if not sin and narrowing of avenues for promises except what is unavoidably attainable for human beings.
Thanks for sharing such a thoughtful reflection !
My only consolation is that there is a promise even if it is put to death !